Psychiatrist script

We as a group divided the work load between us. One of our fellow team mate (Chloe) was in charge of writing this script (draft), in order to make us as a group more organised when filming that particular scene. Chloe then wrote the script and showed me, I then made some changes to the script, as I was playing that particular role and thus, I could see that the way  which some of the words are phrased sounded  far too staged and thus did not come across realistic.

A prime example of this can be seen with the psychiatrist stating 'Your father's body was seen stabbed 9 times'. I however changed it slightly to 'Flora describe your relationship with your father. I understand you were close to him right? Do you miss him? You understand what happened to your father right Flora?' (These were not said in one line-rather in different line when it came to filming. This was to ensure that when it came to editing, we aim as a group will be inter-cutting these lines. By using these  lines, we aimed to give a clear sense of the narrative to the audience without revealing too much of the narrative. I also wanted the psychiatrist to sound more friendly enabling Flora to be open to her, in revealing some of her secretes and deviant behavior hence why such language such as 'right' is used in this context. I aimed to make this child-like language relating and reinforcing Flora's age in our narrative).

FLORA: 'you wouldn't want to know' (then snaps her crayon)- I added this in the script due to the fact that I thought it added more to the atmospheric tension, which was our feedback from our teacher as a way of us improving our horror trailer. I then showed this to Chloe, where  we could discuss how to ensure we build a great sense of tension for our audience, making them uncomfortable whilst evoking a reaction. We then discussed the different camera angles e.g.low angles, worm's eye view, high angle and close up ect... (although Chloe had some camera angles there already, I thought by having a variation would enables us to get the narrative across much more clearly without much being revealed.We then showed it to Afreen, where she also agreed more camera angles were needed. After making some of the changed, I then showed it to Chloe, were me and her made further changes in regards to the line of  Flora, in order to make her more deviant, whilst the still portraying her as innocent as we wanted her to be a likable character such as 'Norman Bates' in 'Psycho' (1960).

These were a few videos I looked at before playing the role of the psychiatrist (in getting some facts e.g. children disorders and language used / mise-en scene):